Peer Review Guide

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  1. SammiSam

    SammiSam New Member

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    I need somebody to read and answer the 10 questions at the end for my essay and then give me a grade. All the stuffs below.
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    Community Service and High School
    I. My view on Community Serivce for High School students
    Pros
    Cons
    Ending sentance

    II. Pros
    Cleaner community
    Less trouble

    III. Cons
    Less time for study
    Less time for work
    Less time for fun

    IV. Closing Statement
    Pros
    Cons
    Closing sentance
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    My view on community service for High School students is neutral. There are many pros and cons to this situation. It could even provide for a better future for the students. But what about the present? In this short essay I will develop my descision on community service for High School students.

    My first paragraph will look at the positive effects it will have on our community and our students. It will definately provide for a cleaner community and even a happier one. As for the students it could keep them out of trouble. Many colleges require community service hours for the student to be accepted. So it may even help the student get into a better college. That is my look at the pros of community service.

    Now for the cons, the students present may become a risk. Students in high school have several things to worry about from fun with friends to work. With the 10 to 15 hours of community server per week this would limit their time for other activities. Many students may have to study or go to work. This will also limit the ammount of after school activities a student may participate in. Such activities like sports and clubs require alot of time and energy to deal with. So those are my cons of community service.

    With all of this being said I think my descision on community service would have to be against it. Even though there are many pros to the situation the cons out weigh them. Students need time for after school activities and studying. Maybe if the hours of the community service were more limited to maybe only 5 to 7 hours it would be a better idea. This is why I have decided I am against 10 to 15 hours of community service per week. I hope this essay has changed your mind too.
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    Greetings!

    In an effort to demonstrate the progress of their writing skills so far this year, English II students have just written a rough draft of a persuasive letter addressing one of two possible topics. Please assist this student in revising his/her paper by answering the short questions based on the writing assessment scoring guide.

    Simply circle YES or NO for each of the 10 questions below, and return this form to the student.

    With sincere thanks for your assistance,
    English II Instructors
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    Score of 6:

    * The writing is focused, purposeful, and reflects insight into the writing situation.
    * The paper conveys a sense of completeness and wholeness with adherence to the main idea, and its organizational pattern provides for a logical progression of ideas.
    * The support is substantial, specific, relevant, concrete, and/or illustrative.
    * The paper demonstrates a commitment to and an involvement with the subject, clarity in presentation of ideas, and may use creative writing strategies appropriate to the purpose of the paper.
    * The writing demonstrates a mature command of language (word choice) with freshness of expression.
    * Sentence structure is varied, and sentences are complete except when fragments are used purposefully.
    * Few, if any, convention errors occur in mechanics, usage, and punctuation.

    Score of 5

    * The writing focuses on the topic, and its organization pattern provides for a progression of ideas, although some lapses may occur.
    * The paper conveys a sense of completeness or wholeness.
    * The support is ample.
    * The writing demonstrates a mature command of language, including precision in word choice.
    * There is variation in sentence structure, and with rare exceptions, sentences are complete except when fragments are used purposely.
    * The paper generally follows the conventions of mechanics, usage, and spelling.

    Score of 4

    * The writing is generally focused on the topic but may include extraneous or loosely related material.
    * An organizational pattern is apparent, although some lapses may occur.
    * The paper exhibits some sense of completeness or wholeness.
    * The support, including word choice, is adequate, although development may be uneven.
    * There is little variation in sentence structure, and most sentences are complete.
    * The paper generally follows the conventions of mechanics, usage, and spelling.

    Score of 3

    * The writing is generally focused on the topic but may include extraneous or loosely related material.
    * An organizational pattern has been attempted, but the paper may lack a sense of completeness or wholeness.
    * Some support is included, but development is erratic.
    * Word choice is adequate but may be limited, predictable, or occasionally vague.
    * There is little, if any, variation in sentence structure.
    * Knowledge of the conventions of mechanics and usage is usually demonstrated, and commonly used words are usually spelled correctly.

    Score of 2

    * The writing may only minimally address the topic.
    * The paper is fragmentary or an incoherent listing of related ideas or sentences or both.
    * Little, if any, development of support or an organizational pattern or both is apparent.
    * Limited or inappropriate word choice may obscure meaning.
    * Gross errors in sentence structure and usage may impede communication.
    * Frequent and blatant errors may occur in the basic conventions of mechanics and usage, and commonly used words may be misspelled.

    The paper is unscorable because the response--

    * Is not related to what the prompt requested the student to do.
    * Is simply a rewording of the prompt.
    * Is a copy of a published work.
    * Is illegible.
    * Is incomprehensible (words are arranged in a way that no meaning is conveyed).
    * Contains an insufficient amount of writing to determine if the student was attempting to address the prompt.

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    OPTION 1~Writing Situation:

    In Module 3 you studied Shakespeare's "A Midsummer Night's Dream," a play in which Hermia's father, Egeus, went to the Duke, Theseus, to complain about Hermia. If you recall, Hermia refused to marry Demetrius because she loved another man, Lysander. This was in direct conflict with what her father ordered her to do, and so Theseus sided with Egeus and gave Hermia four days to comply with her father's wishes, or face death. This conflict brings up the question of the government's right to make decisions about the events of our daily lives. So...let's bring this to a modern day situation.

    Imagine this: Our state government has decided all high school students must complete 10-15 hours of community service each week. This would be in addition to your obligations as a full time student. How would you feel if this was a true situation? Think about the pros and cons of such a requirement. Then write an essay which discusses your feelings on this imaginary situation.
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    1. Does the draft directly relate to one of the optional writing prompts?
    YES or NO

    2. Does the paper have an introduction with a thesis statement?
    YES or NO

    3. Does the paper have a conclusion?
    YES or NO

    4. Does the paper give examples about why the writer has the opinions s/he has on the subject?
    YES or NO

    5. Does it appear that the writer has used spell check?
    YES or NO

    6. Does the paper have errors in punctuation or word choice that you see?
    YES or NO

    7. Do you see run-on sentences or fragments?
    YES or NO

    8. Do you see sentence variety? (E.g., if all the sentences start with the same word or phrase, there is NOT sentence variety.)
    YES or NO

    9. Would you give this essay a score of 3 or higher based on the given rubric?
    YES or NO

    10. Based ONLY on what you have read, did the writer convince you of his/her opinion?
    YES or NO
  2. Pol

    Pol Stuck on the M1 <img src="images/smilies/shakehead Staff Member Super Mod

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    1. Yes
    2. Yes
    3. Yes
    4. Yes
    5. No
    6. Yes
    7. No
    8. Yes
    9. Yes
    10. No

    :)
  3. SammiSam

    SammiSam New Member

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    thank you ^_^

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