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  1. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    its a beautiful day

    its a beautiful day
    its a beautiful day x2

    seasons and day make us feel fresh as hay
    birds swaying sitting on my head making the world
    seem more beautiful
    the trees are growing howling and frowing
    reaching for us to feed

    chorus

    swet and smelling makes the earth smell nice
    roses and buttercups are my fav little small
    creatures can play all day digging up or
    making homes

    chorus

    you know we can make the world better
    if we try
    not to cry
    not to spoil the scence
    which is shrimming in the beam
    when it is beautiful
    beautiful
    just love the fresh air
    which gives you the taste.

    chorus
  2. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    i can lie forever

    i can lie forever forever
    sweet and sexy pie
    when i lie i can i feel so much better better
    cool as i day and night i can lie
    for ever for ever
    sweet and sexy pie

    lying can lead to bad things which i dont
    really care

    when i lie the world is with me
    no one will ever find the truth
    if i keep up with me lies can cause
    which i dont really care
    bad things good things
    sweet and sexy pie

    lying can lead to bad things which i dont really care

    lie
    are
    forever

    lying can lead to bad things which i dont really care

    lyes are forever
    forever
    forever
    ever
    and ever

    lying can lead to bad things which i dont really care

    u should never lie
  3. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    i cant live with out u

    i cant live with out u why did u leave me
    crying lying on my bed u slammed the door
    your voice went low and i still kept on shouting

    chorus

    you cant live with out me
    i know u cant
    u cant live with out me
    or maybe u can

    u listen to me up and above
    my voice is your lyfe
    dont u bloomin lie to me
    i know everything i can see
    remember the day our anniversary
    the ring tells me that u hate me

    days are going badder than before
    i cant true love i know u should come back to me
    {i know u should come back to me}

    chorus

    maturing tells me wats does it mean
    why cant we be back together again
    i apologise again and again

    chorus

    i cant live with out u..........
  4. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    make up

    its party time
    where we have to climb
    upthe mountain high
    to climb miles and miles
    lol just gotta go

    chorus

    get ready for the big day
    we have to get dressed up and down the bay
    first we gotta have cup
    full of tea
    oops we for got the make up make up
    the make up we gotta put it on us

    the is gonna rock
    the drinks are gonna go pop
    the music is so loud
    thats reaches to the cloud

    dont matter what u wear tonight
    were going to party all night
    i felt like i was there
    but it still looks like a dream ere

    chorus

    dance up high down below to ur knees
    here some wine drink it till u feel the beat

    chorus

    its the big day...........
  5. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    cry

    chorus

    i always wanted to say that i
    i never meant to make u cry
    days and days have gone u know
    u havent even said a word oh no

    i needed to know if u have taken my apology
    sitting on the sofa thibkin bout u day and night
    everytime where i go lyfes always a pain
    but i can feel the pain u are having right now

    chorus

    i stole from a shop and got arressted fora day or 2
    u must also know it was all bcause of u
    i gave u my reply and i never got an answer back from you.....

    chorus

    i tried to cool mys elf down my my anger held me down
    i nearly killed my myself but my hand
    didnt hurl
    can u please for give me for the last time i say

    chorus please

    for give meeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

    i didnt
    mean to
    make u cry
  6. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    its a fine life

    i was the one hu came up to you
    to come and fix your bloomin tune
    he was the hu came and lied
    u slapped me without no fine
    days and nights moved on
    without knowing what aws going on
    crying wouldnt make a difference
    what eles could of happen if it was different

    chorus
    guys say its a fine life
    people always say that u shouldnt be afraid
    girls always say no need to say
    u've given away ur fine life

    opening the window
    i can feel the breeze
    its coming from the sky dont u agree
    i've been sitting on the sofa thinkin
    what i could be doing if i wasnt blinking

    chorus

    sitting with a pen an paper
    check wats gonna be next
    wats gonna happen if we dont feel
    cant get u outta my head
    why do i have to go
    i'm leaving i'm leaving everything
    i'm losing it
    when would i get a fine life
    when would i.........
    get a fine life {fine life}
    oh yea.........

    chorus

    i wanna fine life
  7. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    like a boy

    s a i r a h

    didnt u ever wonder
    how would it like to be a boy
    the clothes dnt need to us
    its just who we are
    didnt u ever wonder
    ddint u ever wonder

    given all the money
    and cash we wanna play
    all day with trash
    like a boy
    like a boy
    just like a boy

    we could act like one
    we could be a smart one
    all we could of done was complain
    just like a boy
    just like a boy

    were gonna have fun
    just excatly what you have done
    i'm your only one
    dont u ever get it how would
    it will like to be a boy boy boy

    given all the money
    and cash we wanna play
    all day with trash
    like a boy
    like a boy
    just like a boy

    s a i r a h

    didnt u ever wonder [wonder]
    how would [how]
    it will be [be]
    like [like]
    a [a]
    boy [boy]

    given all the money
    and cash we wanna
    play all day with trash [o trash]
    like a boy [boy]
    like a boy [boy]

    just like a boy!!!!
  8. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    alone

    i i though i was alone
    plus there was no one to hold
    i gave up my world
    for u to come and see
    what i have done for u
    u couldnt believe what i said
    thw words lasted in my head
    i couldnt leave u to behold
    when i just couldnt fold

    baby u know that i couldnt leave u alone [alone]

    i sat down and wonder why
    which ways i had to take
    to complete my very own mistake
    i i couldnt leave u to suffer
    when there was no time to eat the buffet
    me i done what ever could be
    i tryed as hard as u can see
    but

    baby u know that i couldnt leave u alone [alone]

    i gave up myself
    i couldnt live a lie again
    which the lie slowly started to fade

    i didnt know what to say
    when i had to leave
    i i had to let him go
    i couldnt stand him being alone
    with no one to hold
    but i had to go

    i i let him go
    why why did i let him go
    alone
    alone
    alone
  9. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    buttons falling

    some made up song

    chorus

    i'm telling ya to hoosen up my buttons baby
    say u wont do to me aha but u keep frightening me

    ur my baby u having even
    touched me my buttons are falling to
    hit the ground

    chorus

    dont u bloomin frighten me
    i am the best keen on me
    i am ur wife u are my honey
    buttons are falling catch them stitch them
    back on baby

    chorus

    hoosen up my buttons [my buttons]

    baby

    chorus x2
  10. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    full stop

    doing what i wanted all day
    tryin to listen to musik
    u didnt hear a word
    all i wanted was a
    full
    full
    stop

    why did u hit me in the face
    when i was in the base
    looking for my glasses case
    all
    i needed
    was
    a full
    full
    stop

    i couldnt help shouting at ur ulgy face
    u punched me i scream blood went down
    ur sleeve u didnt hear a word in my dream
    what eles could u have done than beam
    all i need
    was a
    full full stop [repeat]

    all i wanted was a full full stop!!!
  11. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    ridin dirty muddy

    police are following
    which we already know
    they after up the hill down the road
    which we need to take control of

    chorus

    they see me running hating
    but they cant see me ridin dirty
    trying catch me ridin dirty

    ur telling me to get up and go away
    which u r also in my way
    i cant give the keys to the car
    which u have locked up in the bar
    i am no one to be fooling on
    even if i am doing it so wrong
    i got reason to be shouted at
    maybe u should walk through the cat flap
    u look the a piece of fool u know
    i can atually tell u oh no
    u think ur buff
    which i can also cough
    dont know what ur chatting bout
    i dont even wanna count
    for the last time i say my o my

    chorus

    i have lived here for a few years
    what i had no fear to live here
    here the lot before long for got
    run from ere the police r coming to take u
    from right ere

    there is the exit
    run
    run
    run
    chrous
  12. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    luck

    i am a lucky girl in a lucky world
    where everyone loves and loves
    no ones my enemy which i can prove oh me
    i get presents from heaven which i can accept dearly
    i have my own room i am oretty sweet and sexy
    why dont u believe me i have a big family
    where i can live with them forever

    lucky lucky girl

    pretty babes from the babes
    which i can deny from all of u
    u r mine i can have it all guess what age
    i am i better be 95 dont u believe


    lucky lucky girl

    i have lots of gadgets which i
    can play all the time dil doba is the word
    i am a lucky girl


    lucky lucky girl

    lucky lucky girl
  13. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    finally

    finally finally i have reached
    the stage where i'm not a loser where
    i can be a poser finally
    finally here i am with luck and money
    i have showed u know know its ur turn to see

    we were rocking all the way
    the people watched us play
    we finally reached the stage
    after being locked up in the cage
    being loners and losers
    now we are posers

    finally finally i have reached
    the stage where i'm not a loser where
    i can be a poser finally
    finally here i am with luck and money
    i have showed u know know its ur turn to see

    sometimes there are times
    which we need to handle
    if some one forces u
    u can show them hu u r
    i know days and days
    ur stuck home with lot
    and u cant give the luck
    u need to give...............
    my love..........

    finally finally i have reached
    the stage where i'm not a loser where
    i can be a poser finally
    finally here i am with luck and money
    i have showed u know know its ur turn to see

    finally
    finally
    we have [have]
    reached the stage [ the stage]
    where there no need to be a loser [loser]
    and always be a poser [ always be a poser]
    finally [finally]
    finally [finally]
    i have showed u now its ur turn to see
    finally [finally]

    finally finally i have reached
    the stage where i'm not a loser where
    i can be a poser finally
    finally here i am with luck and money
    i have showed u know know its ur turn to see

    finally.........................................
  14. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    earth is with us

    when life feels bored and there is nothing to be
    no need to fell bad sing along when u feel

    earth is with us
    earth is with us
    which u need to believe
    there is something on that
    earth has 4 u
    just for u

    no need to worry slowly
    upsetting wont help ur
    lovely soaring life
    keep ur smile where ever u r
    no need to worry
    my dearly honey

    earth is with us
    earth is with us
    which u need to believe
    there is something on that
    earth has 4 u
    just for u

    finelly u have reached the stage
    where u cant take no more
    finely u have recieved thats
    there no need to worry [no need to worry]
    earth is no more
    why do u think that
    why dont u agree

    earth is with us
    earth is with us
    which u need to believe
    there is something on that
    earth has 4 u
    just for u

    theres no need to worry
    i am here to help pain and relief
    enjoy every part of life

    earth is with us
    earth is with us
    which u need to believe
    there is something on that
    earth has 4 u
    just for u

    no need to worry
    earth is with us
  15. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    paki

    i'm a paki gangster
    in a world where there are no waster
    aha aha
    we walk like geezers no like bloomin freezers
    we r the
    paki gangster

    we have our own way
    come on babe we need to play
    nice mate we bye our cars
    out of metel flowing bars
    the girls we have just make us cool
    we made them like lonely fools
    the clothes we wear
    we dont atually have to fear
    our life is like flyin birds
    like our paki gangster curds

    we call our selves the paki gangsters

    i'm a paki gangster
    in a world where there are no waster
    aha aha
    we walk like geezers no like bloomin freezers
    we r the
    paki gangster

    ur telling me to get up and walk
    dont think ur cool with a folk
    my keys are at home
    why dont u ask for a ****ing phone

    we are the paki gangsters

    i'm a paki gangster
    in a world where there are no waster
    aha aha
    we walk like geezers no like bloomin freezers
    we r the
    paki gangsteri'm a paki gangster
    in a world where there are no waster
    aha aha
    we walk like geezers no like bloomin freezers
    we r the
    paki gangster

    like a paki gangster
    we can talk
    paki gangster
  16. embybearx3

    embybearx3 New Member

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    The Little Girl

    I wrote this song for my little sister...
    ===============================
    A little girl is sitting in her room;
    she's so scared and so confused.
    Why does her Mama say those things?
    Does she know the pain she brings?

    :Chorus:
    She's sitting alone now,
    got no one to talk to.
    She's scared out of her mind thinkin',
    'What's her Mama gonna do?'

    The little girl reaches out to the world;
    she shudders from the memories uncurled.
    She sees her Mama raise her hand,
    thinkin' 'Did God have all this planned?'

    :Chorus:

    :Bridge:
    My heart bleeds for that little girl;
    I know how she feels.
    I outstretch my hands to that little girl
    to ease her mind as it reels.

    :Chorus 2:
    She's not alone anymore;
    there's people, for her they care for.
    Her Mama's long gone away.
    That little girl was finally saved.
  17. hammer8

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    I Miss You, I Miss You
    By: Myslef

    I feel all alone
    I feel so confused
    I feel like you're gone
    And it hurts without you
    I miss you, I miss you
    I need you back
    Please girl come home
    It's you that I lack
    You had me convinced
    That you'd miss me
    I feel that you don't
    And need reminding
    Girl I thought we were meant
    To be you and me
    I thought we were set
    We were flying
    But I guess I was wrong
    Cause you seem happy
    I'm sitting here alone
    And you're without me

    Chorus:
    I miss you, I miss you
    But do you miss me?
    Cause it feels like I'm the one
    Doin' the missing
    Girl I miss you, I miss you
    I hate life without you
    And I just don't know
    If I can go on anymore

    I try to go without you
    But think of you each day
    I try to forget you
    But you're amazing
    And I try to hate you
    But you're best for me
    And what I really hate
    Is not bein' with you
    And now that you're gone
    I can't believe it's true
    God, Is this happening?
    I miss you, I miss you

    Chorus


    tell me wat u think
  18. MangoMaddnes

    MangoMaddnes New Member

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    Hey guys! Tell me what you think of this song lyric I wrote when someone lies to me all the time:

    Refrain: Lies, lies
    Burning a hole through my side!
    Cry, cry
    Rippin' the tears out of my eyes
    Lies, lies
    Burning a hole through my side!
    Cry, cry,
    Rippin' the tears out of my eyes
    Die hard-- and try again!!

    V1: Hear the words...about to be spoken.
    Tell the dream to me...the ones that are broken.
    See the pain...flying to someone's heart.
    Scream it out...beginning to start.
    (All over...it's all over.)
    Hanging on...right on the edge.
    Feeling tough...on that single thread.
    Stop telling me the black twisted lies.
    I'm about to cry!

    V2: Crucify....die hard, and try again they say.
    Open my eyes....and go the right way.
    I'm here....in the cage, set me free!
    Your honor...I won't gurantee.
    Stop telling me the black twisted lies.
    I'm about to die!!!!!!

    Refain!

    V4: The darkness seems to grasp my mind!
    The watch I have....is going back in time!!!
    Screaming the pain I have, with you is like
    The weight of the world.
    I'm just one girl.
    Your tears just fall form the sky
    Just reaching there is way too high.
    Just let me jump, just me fly!!!!!!!
  19. desipwincess

    desipwincess New Member

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    lurvee it sliick song xx
  20. MangoMaddnes

    MangoMaddnes New Member

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    Very good song. How about mine? You have good rythme!!:)!

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