Post your own lyrics for critique!

Discussion in 'Lyrics' started by Hopkins, Feb 14, 2003.

  1. NovaTronic

    NovaTronic New Member

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    Still Standing

    Hey guys, tell me what you think about this song, message me your thoughts, whether my lyrics just aren't good enough for your likings, or you absolutely love these lyrics, let me see what you guys think and don't say: "Your song sucks.." That's just a no-brainer right there, be more constructive with your feedback! Alright, PEACE BE THE JOURNEY!

    [Verse 1]
    Some shoot for stars
    I shoot for space
    I shoot for the final frontier in my way.
    Some they go far, some they go wars
    But in the end, it'll all be okay

    From all those wars that we've fought
    All the fallen, we support
    To the enemy, peace to all
    Peace be the journey, yeah the flag won't fall.

    [Chorus]
    Because we're all, still standing strong
    Keep on moving 'cause that's all we do
    We're still standing, the haters all can move

    Because we're all, still standing strong
    Let'em know that you struggle to survive
    But you're still standing through all those nights.

    [Verse 2]
    Some go free, some are trapped behind bars
    When the night goes down, then trouble is about
    When is the world taking it's final frontier
    Going down because all the people don't care

    Famous person die, millions cry
    But million others fall to the ground
    And no cries, no one thinks
    With all the money that they got spending it on drinks.

    Through all those days, I'm still standing
    Through those sleepless nights, still standing
    Let'em know you're there, that you strugglin'
    You gotta keep screaming 'til they hear you because.

    [Chorus]
    We're all, still standing strong
    Keep on moving 'cause that's all we do
    We're still standing, the haters all can move

    Because we're all, still standing strong
    Let'em know that you struggle to survive
    But you're still standing through all those nights.

    [Verse 3]
    Props up to the soldiers
    Risking their life for the people
    Defending their country
    And one by one they all fall.

    They say it's a flesh wound
    Others say they won't go
    Without a fight, we all have might
    We're still standing tall...

    Everyday and night, I'm livin' to fight
    See the flag go down, half way ain't right
    Enemy say they took down everyone
    They missed one, me and my country all come as one
    Peace to all, they don't understand.
    A foreign language, but I still stand.
    No matter who you are, I stand for you
    For all them countries, heck I support you!

    Comin' all the way from the land of New Zealand
    I'm a soldier of one, supporting all them other regions
    From America, to Brazil, to Africa then Haiti
    Then I stop, take a break then start again
    Roll up here, there and here and here, don't forget there.

    I've been waiting for a century
    For the people to finally listen
    This call ain't for another one
    So rise your lighters in the air
    We all sing, to the fallen everywhere
    Coming from, Russia, Hawaii, Asia and around the world we go.

    [Chorus]
    Because we're all, still standing strong
    Keep on moving 'cause that's all we do
    We're still standing, the haters all can move

    Because we're all, still standing strong
    Let'em know that you struggle to survive
    But you're still standing through all those nights.

    "Sometimes in my tears I drown
    But I never let them get me down
    So when negativity's around
    I know some day, it'll all turn around"

    - Matisyahu.
    Last edited: Apr 24, 2012
  2. AprilGeorge

    AprilGeorge New Member

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    Dont want to hear the words

    Vers 1
    Telling me that i`m ugly
    doesn`t make you much prettier
    Telling me that I?m overweigthed
    doesn`t make you much stronger

    Vers 2
    Dont play with mye confidance,
    It`s not much left
    Dont play with my feelings
    soon i can`t hold on anymore

    Ref
    Stop
    It`s enough
    You breaking my heart in two
    I don`t want to hear the words anymore
    Can`t you seee that you hurting me

    Stop
    It`s enough
    You breaking mye heart in two
    I donĀ“t wnat to hear the words anymore
    can`t you se that you hurting me?
    Last edited: May 25, 2012
  3. musicbetti

    musicbetti New Member

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    Running Away From Pain

    Hi, everyone! This is my first post in this forum :)

    Here's my lyric treat for you that I've written. It's my first one, and I need good and helpful critics on it.

    It's called "Running Away From Pain" and it's more like a deep song.

    [Verse 1]
    Thought it'd never be this way
    I find myself in my thoughts
    With memories that now seem to darken
    It feels like my memories of us decay


    [Verse 2]
    I've tried to fight it all at once
    The darkness that you have shed
    And the lies that you allways fed me
    But I won't put up with it anymore


    [Post-Chorus]
    Cause it taunts me, taunts me
    So eat my goodbye


    [Chorus]
    You'll never see me again
    I'm running away from you
    Running away from the pain
    This pain, this pain
    This pain, this pain
    I've had enough


    [Verse 3]
    You used to show a lot of care
    Back then maybe it was true
    But now it seems like you ignore me
    You act like I am some nobody


    [Verse 4]
    I can't believe that you have changed
    I don't know you anymore
    No matter what I can't get through you
    So long now, I have had enough


    [Post-Chorus]
    Cause it taunts me, taunts me
    So eat my goodbye


    [Chorus]
    You'll never see me again
    I'm running away from you
    Running away from the pain
    This pain, this pain
    This pain, this pain
    I've had enough


    [Outro]
    I feel relieved
    I am free
  4. proudhollow

    proudhollow New Member

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    IT.hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
    Last edited: Sep 25, 2012

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